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0.2.1

it was important to write without changing a single word at a time

it was important to copy verbatim

I know the word "verbatim", but it seems too difficult for non-native readers

I keep the original at this time. Any suggestions?

It is the same structure.

It therefore has the same structure.

Need "therefore"?

0.2.2

finding common patterns from multiple units of concrete information

How about: "multiple pieces of"

I used the word "pieces" in chapter 5

0.2.3

doesn't work as expected.

doesn’t work as anticipated.

What's the difference between "expected" and "anticipated"?

That sample code will not directly tell you how to achieve your goal of outputting “Hello, (line break) world!”. Obviously, it will be a code to display something different. However, if you compare this new sample code with the information you collected so far, you will find another pattern, and you can create a new hypothesis about how to implement it to achieve your goal.

I want to mean:

The sample code will not satisfy your goal directly

(The sample code = code which you find on the Internet)

(your goal = outputting “Hello, (line break) world!”)

The sample code is a code to display something different.

However, if you compare this new sample code with the information you collected so far, you will find another pattern, and you can create a new hypothesis about how to implement it to achieve your goal.

(This sentence looks too long, isn't it?)

Moreover, how about to add a footnote as an example of "new sample code"

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